READ THE POEM FIRST!!!! THEN READ THE REST OF THIS!!!!
Again! Read the poem before going on!!!!!
Well, I know I've said it before, and I'll say it again. Poems are always better when they rhyme!
But I felt if I worked on getting the rhyme scheme down, it would have taken away from the feelings that inspired the poem, y'know? This is, more or less, the first draft, nearly unedited. Keeps the “raw” feeling in.
Kay, enough technical stuff.
For like 4 days…nights, I’ve been having the same dream, about this girl I don’t know, and never met. At first, I had no idea what it was about, but I came to realize that, at least in this dream world, she was my girlfriend, maybe something more. Everything I stated in the poem, I derived from the dreams, so they’re true as far as my mind will allow me to believe them to be. (read it again if you didn’t understand it the first time. It makes sense to me.)
I’m always very happy in these dreams, but am very sad when I return to real consciousness again. Not so much cuz it was a good dream that I’m sad not to be dreaming anymore, but that I know that I shouldn’t be torturing myself with these…these fantasies. It wouldn’t be so bad, except that it’s a reasonably realistic fantasy, and one that I want really
bad. I don’t know if any one of you has ever experienced something like this before, but it really makes me sad.
After this morning’s dream… or well yesterday morning’s (it’s 1:09 am now) the idea of this poem worked its way into my head, and I wrote it out. I knew I had to post it, just so at least one other person could read it (and I didn‘t really trust anyone in my dorm to take it really seriously, y‘know?). I know that I have some other works I need to get done, but I had to do this real quick, for me.
So please let me know what you think. (kn1ghtmar3, I’m particularly interested in what you have to say.) Let me know if you think it coulda been improved or anything too, but I want more genuine comments as opposed to technique comments, y’know? And if you didn‘t understand something, please ask.